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The line graph is about the average price of television decade （用此错误，它的意思是十年，decade 的常用用法是several decades， one decade， 或者the next decades ）into the future.

The graph illustrates how the average price of a television set changed in Utopia over several decades and predicts the future trend.

There was a sharp rise in the number of TV （此篇线性题是关于价格的，跟数量没关系，这里严重跑题）from 500 at 1940 to 2500 at 1950（单位没有，年之前的介词用in）. According to the line, the amount of dollars （“美元的数量”跑题，应该是“电视机价格”）sharply decline （应该是过去式，注意时态）from 2500 at 1950 to 500 at 1970（没有单位，介词用错）. And then, the period from 1970 to1980 witnessed a slowly（应该用它的形容词形式slow， 或者用slight） rise in the number of dollars （审题有误，跑题） from 500 to 600. However, the number of dollars experienced a sharply rising trend with the figure increasing from （用得很好！） 600 at 1980 to 2050 at 2000 （同样的问题反复）. From 2000 to 2010, it remained almost stable （不是非常准确）, and then, in 2020s, the number drop （时态不对，过去式） gradual（应该用副词形式gradually，修饰前面的动词）, with a slight decrease（好） from 2100 at 2010s to 2000 at 2020s.

The average price of a TV Set was 500 dollars in 1940s. In the following decade, the figure increased to the peak sharply at the price of 2500 dollars. Then after 1950s the data has experienced a drop back to 500 dollars for each TV set in 1970s. In the following three decades, the average price per TV set witnessed an increasing trend, to the price of 2050 dollars in 2000s, and the figure continued to rise until the price was 2100 dollar in 2010s. It has been predicted that the average price of a TV set will drop slightly


to 2000 dollars from 2010s to 2020s.

However, much more people par the price of TV in 2020s rather than 1940s （表意不准确，看不懂）. As a whole, the average Price of a TV set in Vtopia will have a good news.(不客观)

In sum, the average price of a television set has changed dramatically from 1940s to 2010s, and it will drop slightly from 2010s to 2020s. the highest price was 2500 dollars. However, the lowest price was 500 dollars over the several decades.

评语：首先开始动手写是一个好的开始，同时文章中出现了一些好的短语，但是要注意整篇文章没有一个完全正确的句子。原因之一是审题不细致不准确，第二词语的用法没有掌握好，第三时态有用错的地方。继续多练习，动笔之前要审题细致不能跑题，讨论的东西错了，整篇文章就有大问题。

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